Sunday, February 20, 2011

Phoenix Resurrected


i look back and it flashes over - taking me down in its undertow. similar to anti-gravity, i'm drifting away from earth.  how long in this undertow
can i last
and it's been almost a year since i gave up, didn't look back. actually withdrew myself from plenty, and i could consume more. endure it all much better, and learn more.

i took the guts right out of it and sent it to the coroner, and i'll stand by when they slap you on the table. they'll cut you open like sunday dinner, but they won't be expecting what i already knew.  you survived with insides that curdled, so sour.  it amazing you lasted with that putrid stink.  and to think you grimaced at passerby's when they twisted their faces.  you swelled with anger when you knew it was was all misconceptions (how you believed to be looked upon - once described as "completely bloated in an ignorant figment of how [you're] viewed), your brand had cascaded.  you cried behind the shed in your backyard while your parents watched out the kitchen window.  they were hesitant to come to your side, you constantly pushed away those invested in you. 

so it was no surprise when they tell me it's mostly empty, you were running on ashes and all that was there is black, i'll share a laugh with your ghost right after i remind the coroner to take care of the remains. and it's funny because when you were still here i told myself you lost your dignity.  now i find myself defending it, and excusing it for the past.

50 comments:

  1. I absolutely love your writing style as well as your seeming penchant for great analysis of the melancholy. I'll be following from now on!

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  2. That had a lot of good imagery. While it was pretty sad, I must say i liked it.

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  3. this is good, in a dark way...

    randomramblingggg.blogspot.com

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  4. I really love it, very dark. Very nice writing style.

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  5. did u just make this science fiction up off the top of your head? good job.

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  6. Stream of consciousness can be more useful than just telling sometimes. I think you have a knack for it. Following.

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  7. thats sad yet the title is phoenix resurrected?

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  8. Wow, that was really moving...thanks!

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  9. wow, nice. very melancholic, i like it :)

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  10. I honestly didn't understand what you were trying to say.

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  11. you need to be more optimistic about life :)

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  12. dude there is happiness out there go and get it :D

    nice writing, when will you write something with more "color"?

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  13. Loved the last sentence. Really moving piece.

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  14. I really enjoyed this story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

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  15. Ahh thanks for this, kind of refreshing! thumbs up!

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  16. Aw :( you make me want to cry, but its a good thing lol

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  17. I have not read something this intense in a while! Keep it up.

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  18. Nice read =)
    these look like professional lyrics from a song or something!

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  19. This was a really good read man, great job and keep this kind of stuff up.

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  20. It's scary how death can affect how one is remembered...beautiful work.

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  21. it appears as if you and misery are well acquainted with one another.

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  22. Beautiful writing. I liked the "running on ashes" part at the end. Thanks for the read!

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  23. I tad sad, but that's its beauty. I really do appreciate your writing style.

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  24. very good and short read, you sir, got some talent !

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  25. Nice. You've got some pretty good writing habits I can see from your other posts.

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  26. Great post. Very well written.

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  27. I'm having a lot of trouble understanding that first paragraph, but the last one actually moved me. A funny feeling after you've been sitting apathetically behind the computer for a while.

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