Monday, April 4, 2011

"Tell Me" Responded The Believer

we're too proud of our struggles, and useless luggage
and yet we find everything we've been searching for all without trouble
so if it's good to think wisely, how come it doesn't feel fine (it strands you with nothing)
but i've broke through it all, it's just the free fall
you know how we end up? declared demons of our species, the grave robbers, and decadent beauty, all wind up the same, a face in a frame, on a wall in a house
all built with bare hands, the only things that still stand.  all our frequent dreams, they conclude - the curtain dropping is what finally stops us
so heavenly father, please, tell me this - should i look down?
because i lost something trying not to get it stolen
i'm about to show all my cards, i'm folding

41 comments:

  1. If this is honest, don't fold. If it's not, you really sucked me in. Nice job.

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  2. last line is EPIC. Major props for this powerful work of yours

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  3. this is great :)
    was interesting to read as well haha

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  4. An especially powerful title for a piece with religious themes.

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  5. i like your blog. keep up the good work

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  6. nice ending, love that reference

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  7. Love your posts! It reaches out.

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  8. 'declared demons of our species'

    Love it.

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  9. i am not a religious guy but this was moving

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  10. love the ending, show cards and fold. powerful

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  11. As always, so beautifully written <3

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  12. well put together really i dont know what to say only thing i cant think of is this is some real strong stuff

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  13. Your work on this blog is great! keep it up!

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  14. Very delightful. Thank you.

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  15. Showing all your cards is a bold move, indeed. But I wonder now, is it acceptance you need?

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  16. I think that the last line was really powerful and tied it all together perfectly.

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  17. very introspective - its great

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  18. Giving it all up for the truth :D

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  19. wow... lost something trying to protect it... this is deep man!

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  20. amazing post!

    http://all-around-toto.blogspot.com/

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  21. Hi, I;m Karolina. ;))
    You have a very nice blog .. it is wonderful and beautiful .. I greet the Polish;))~; ^

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  22. That was actually really beautiful

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  23. Very beautiful and elegant, I think you took a snapshot of the crisis of faith very well.

    You are absolutely awesome!

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  24. Very, very cool. Seriously. Nice job!

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