Monday, March 14, 2011

Blank For The Stranger

i know what you're doing as you try to do it
i just wish you'd quit it
and here's for my critics
and the sloppy rain we watched together
broken hearts are clumped together
stay near me, i'm hopeful- i know it doesn't show
but things i've done don't decide what i'll do
cause moving on is such a drastic song
i play a couple notes, then get buried along

i know what you're trying to do as you do it
but quit looking sexy, it's ruining everything
mostly my plans get foiled as soon as i see you Bare
it's all too much for my fragile nerves
along with my everlasting desire to-
transform what we had into a great deal more
complex task that i dont mind
because you're still the closest stranger

i know what you do when you do it
hearts can't ache when they've been taken out
and used as weapons, i'm sorry i cried
it worsened the arid conditions that existed
when we fell in love

62 comments:

  1. good job meghan! i always love what you post!

    keep up darling!

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  2. Nice. The overall message, well it took me a couple of reads to get it. I got it, just slow.. I'd love to just hear spoken out to me.

    But yes, nicely written.

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  3. Love the work! Keep it up its great!

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  4. Relationships are like busses... If it doesn't go in the direction you want it to, get off rather then to hijack it.

    People need not be afraid of being alone for they never are. Just much about :D

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  5. Really good man. Keep it up!

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  6. That was just fun to read! thx

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  7. Nice. Looking forward to more.

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  8. nice rhyme scheme, pretty emotional in a good way

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  9. I didn't really feel it with this one, but still great stuff

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  10. Another very good example of the depth and subtlety of your writing style!

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  11. Beautiful story, full of very good words.

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  12. The last line hits it nicely. I like it.

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  13. This is kind of sad, but I really like it.

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  14. very nice.
    also, I´m follower #200. congratulations.

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  15. well said couldnt agree with you more keep up the good work :)

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  16. Nice stuff, as expected with your blog. Consistent quality posts.

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  17. Good story, try to record it with guitar.

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  18. Keep it up, there's something unique about the way these phrases turn that keeps me coming back.

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  19. omg, some parts of it made me go "get out of my head charles!"

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  20. @Tony Storm
    haha yep
    but anyway nicely written

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  22. Great poem, I really enjoy these, keep them coming!

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  24. You should add new latter please :)

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  25. I hope my comment doesnt get buried in the 60 others but great blog! I just started following and cant wait for your next post!

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  26. you write some deep stuff i like it

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