Wednesday, March 2, 2011

My Grievances Defeat Me

i'm catatonic and you keep me this way
the truth is within everything you bring
that you might as well take it back
bring it to the origin where it can be reborn
christened with new potential

and as we walk i hum the tune of a song
my dad used to sing it, cared for it then
now it's damp and heavy from tears it's absorbed
- i just can't like it anymore

forever is a ploy, a sham, a fake, a fraud
she better hope she never sees me
i'll spread the news like wildfire,
surrounding her in a circle, no opening

bright lights blinding the seeing eye dog
the guide we relied on, hapless like us
he lead us to a salvaged path - but,
not without the motion of the sham
i retract this state of crisis
for deeper waters with wilder waves
ones that'll take my life before i'm saved

40 comments:

  1. Beautiful words, just like you. Hope you're having a good week meg!

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  2. yo, well done!
    http://baxxmans.blogspot.com/

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  3. I get a sense of lost life within this passage. A Strong narrative as well. Keep it up! :D

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  4. As always, very heartfelt and very touching. Definitely looking forward to more!

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  5. This was great.

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  6. i love your last stanza, very poetic

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  7. "forever is a ploy, a sham, a fake, a fraud
    she better hope she never sees me
    i'll spread the news like wildfire,
    surrounding her in a circle, no opening"

    I sense anger and disdain....tough times?

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  8. another great post, keep em coming.

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  9. i retract this state of crisis
    for deeper waters with wilder waves
    ones that'll take my life before i'm saved

    I like how you ended it with these lines. Don't really know why, tho. Just feeling something in em.

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  10. Hem.. erf.. eh.. cool !
    (French here >_< )

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  11. I don't normally follow poetry blogs, but I really, really like this piece. Going through the archives to read the rest. Great work.

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  12. Cool words - well written

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  13. i like you blog....
    i have also a blog, you can watch it
    http://hackers001.blogspot.com

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  14. I have great respect for poets, as I am not one and I suck at rhyming ;p

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  15. nice poem. quite well written.

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  16. Melancholy but lovely. I liked the closing couplet especially.

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  17. nice post! keep it up, im following!

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  18. he said that quote withing the last two weeks. just youtube his name its hilarious

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  19. You're prose are excellent, keep it coming.

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  20. Deep stuff... Keep up the good work!

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  21. Nice post,. Followed!
    alphabetalife.blogspot.com

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  22. My grievances also defeat me.

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  23. i luv the lion king!!! cried like a baby back when i was 6

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  24. grieavances defeat many people +followed

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  25. thank you. it was very beautiful..

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